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Post by sandpelt on Apr 19, 2007 18:08:55 GMT -5
chaptr 1
RunningFang was on a hunting patrol. When hawkfur came into sight. "hi RunningFang"said HawkFur. you need to take stonepaw to the traning hollow please. ya i can take him ill do what i can. "ok see you back at camp"said HawkFur.
RunningFang took stonepaw to the taining hollow. We need to tran if you are going to get your name. RunningFang said.i know. so they traind and then went hunting. stonepaw tast the air and smells a rabbit. he get in a hunting crouch and paw by paw he gets closer then he jumps on it. he killes it then stonpaw and RunningFang go back to camp.
when they went into the ravine they saw brightstar on the hight rock.
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Post by rex. on Apr 21, 2007 12:51:21 GMT -5
you really need to work on your puntuation. i can help you with that a bit if you'd like. its a good start! oh, and 'chapter' has an 'e' in it
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Post by sandpelt on Apr 21, 2007 13:54:31 GMT -5
ok
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