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Post by Hatchey on Feb 20, 2007 10:48:42 GMT -5
Losing Hope Blood...... thats all he could see. A dark brown tabby tom watched in horror as the black rouge ripped a pale tabby tom to shreds. Bramblestorm jolted awake in terror. it was just a dream. he said to himself. just a dream Bramblestorm remembered the night his brother was killed. Nocturne, a black tom, and Tress, another rouge, had come onto shadow clan territory with the sole intention of killing Lionclaw. Bramblestorm closed his eyes as he saw the image of the two rogues not just killing his brother, slaughtering him. (i will add more later. on a scale of 1-4, how is it so far)
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Post by rex. on Feb 20, 2007 11:09:44 GMT -5
so far, 3.5 i like that you are using cats that we have heard of from here. sounds good so far, i look foward to seeing more of it.
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Post by Hatchey on Feb 20, 2007 11:26:04 GMT -5
Bramblestorm's mate, Spottedshadow, was woken up by Bramblestorm's shaking. Bramblestorm, what is wrong? she asked in concern for the tabby tom. Bramblestorm looked at her. He still felt the same joy looking at her sparkling eyes now as he did when he first saw them. i'm fine Spottedshadow. he said still trapped by her angelic beauty.
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Post by Metal Insanex24 on Feb 20, 2007 11:29:19 GMT -5
now i rate this as a 5.0
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Post by shâdowõlƒ on Mar 5, 2007 23:14:01 GMT -5
Mmmm. . . I like this story! Like Kash said, there are characters I remember when I was here months ago. Could have been longer and more detailed.
Rating: ¤ ¤ ¤ ¤ Four Stars
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