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Apr 13, 2006 13:41:56 GMT -5
Post by *Simply Seasle* on Apr 13, 2006 13:41:56 GMT -5
i'm tired of writing right now......i'm going to go get something to eat
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Apr 13, 2006 13:48:52 GMT -5
Post by *Simply Seasle* on Apr 13, 2006 13:48:52 GMT -5
now i'm going to wait for a member to post......and say what they think about my story
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Apr 13, 2006 17:54:17 GMT -5
Post by [F]irekee on Apr 13, 2006 17:54:17 GMT -5
love it! ;D
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Apr 13, 2006 21:01:42 GMT -5
Post by |g.O.l.d.Y| on Apr 13, 2006 21:01:42 GMT -5
I like it and all, but it really hurts my eyes because of lack of paragraph use. If you want Seasle I would gladly edit it so there's proper paragraph use. I'll wait for your consent. ~:Goldy:~
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Apr 14, 2006 10:51:16 GMT -5
Post by *Simply Seasle* on Apr 14, 2006 10:51:16 GMT -5
okay, i don't mind
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Apr 14, 2006 21:04:02 GMT -5
Post by |g.O.l.d.Y| on Apr 14, 2006 21:04:02 GMT -5
There you go! ^^ ~:Goldy:~
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Apr 15, 2006 9:56:23 GMT -5
Post by *Simply Seasle* on Apr 15, 2006 9:56:23 GMT -5
here's more
River woke up and stretched, her eyes adjusting to the darkness of the night. She began to walk forwards, as silently as a leaf falling.
River saw a squirrel, it was sitting beside a tree root. She crept towards it, and pounced, easily catching the squirrel in her paws. River ate the squirrel, thinking. I have to get out of this forest quickly; I don’t have a lot of time. And I can’t get lost, how can I avoid that?
River’s leaf green eyes lit up as she thought of a way to make sure she didn’t get lost. I’ll mark every tree I past with my claws and my scent, that way I’ll know which way I’ve gone.
River began to walk forward again, stopping to mark every tree she passed.
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Apr 21, 2006 17:23:36 GMT -5
Post by *Simply Seasle* on Apr 21, 2006 17:23:36 GMT -5
River saw an owl flying above her. She ran after it remembering that her mother had told her that owls always knew where prey was. She saw the owl stop and fly down to land on a tree. River walked over to the tree, and stared in surprise, barely noticing the owl, which had flown off. I’ve found my way out of the forest, just by following an owl! River purred in amusement as she looked at the scene before her.
Long golden grass was clumped over flat moorland, and after that, River could see the mountains, rising high into the sky. River began to run over the dusty ground, welcoming the last rays of the sun that warmed her pelt. She ran all through the night, her excitement filling her with energy.
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Apr 28, 2006 19:47:20 GMT -5
Post by *Simply Seasle* on Apr 28, 2006 19:47:20 GMT -5
could you give me some feedback? please?
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May 5, 2006 19:58:52 GMT -5
Post by *Simply Seasle* on May 5, 2006 19:58:52 GMT -5
please post something!!!
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Jun 12, 2006 11:17:41 GMT -5
Post by *Simply Seasle* on Jun 12, 2006 11:17:41 GMT -5
When the sun rose, River discovered that she was near the edge of the moorland, and also close to a large clump of grass. A rest wouldn’t hurt me, but I can only sleep until full-brightness.
River woke up, and quickly washed herself, cleaning the pieces of grass out of her fur. She walked to the edge of the moorland, and the beginning of the mountains, easily covering ground with her quick, steady pace. I should catch some prey; I know I can’t keep this up. She searched the mountain for signs of life, and saw a small mouse, a bit farther up. River crept up on the mouse, and then pounced on it, killing it quickly. She ate the mouse, and thought. I have to hurry; I can't stop like this often! River stood up and shook her pelt, before running up the side of the mountain, and feeling very grateful to have been born for running in anyplace.
Even River couldn't keep up that pace for long, and at night she had to stop and walk. River liked the way the cool breeze blowed against her; it was like the wind was challenging her.
When the sun came up River gasped. The rays of the sun were reflected off of the ocean. River remembered her mentor telling her that the sea was the largest river she would ever see. "So this is the sea" she meowed quietly to herself.
River walked forwards, and stopped in surprise as her paws touched sand.
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Jun 12, 2006 12:59:34 GMT -5
Post by The Only Froggems YOU KNOW! on Jun 12, 2006 12:59:34 GMT -5
I luff it Seasleosa, really and truly!
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Jun 13, 2006 0:32:59 GMT -5
Post by |g.O.l.d.Y| on Jun 13, 2006 0:32:59 GMT -5
May I make a suggestion? You say River too much, it's not always necessary to say 'River' if it's only one cat at the time.
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Jun 15, 2006 18:59:25 GMT -5
Post by *Simply Seasle* on Jun 15, 2006 18:59:25 GMT -5
I see.I'll try to change that when I write more.
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