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Post by Swifttail on Feb 10, 2009 17:34:16 GMT -5
Err... you did it wrong again.
Although, it is fairly good!
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Post by Icesky on Feb 10, 2009 17:35:21 GMT -5
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Post by //Cindy// l u n a on Feb 10, 2009 21:56:38 GMT -5
When you role-play, you can only use your character. So instead of talking about several different characters, you only can talk about what your characters are doing. If you make up what other members' characters are doing, it's called power-playing. Power-playing is against the rules.
Think of the RP as a movie. You're inside one of the character's heads, and you're writing about what they're thinking and doing and what's happening around them. What you described took place over a long period of time. Instead, talk about something that's happening in only a few seconds.
One thing you did really well on was the perspective. You wrote about how your character was feeling and what she was thinking, but you didn't say "I". Perfect!
When you RP, you need to pick a place in the territory. The territory boards are the board that's called "ThunderClan" and everything below it. Be careful - people often post in the Warriors United Archives by mistake. That's where the old threads go.
If you want to do something extra, too, take a look at the titles of the other threads on the site. Most people try to write their titles so that other members will want to come look and then reply. Read some of the other threads and see if it helps you.
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Scartail
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Smiles to everyone in the WORLD!!!
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Post by Scartail on Feb 18, 2009 14:56:22 GMT -5
I deleted That!!!
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Post by Swifttail on Feb 18, 2009 16:55:12 GMT -5
Hey, Moonwhisker is in River, by the way.
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