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Dec 11, 2005 19:18:08 GMT -5
Post by *Simply Seasle* on Dec 11, 2005 19:18:08 GMT -5
seapaw woke up and looked around she was in a cave with a glowing stone in the middle a soft voice spoke "would you like the gift of speed from the windclan cats in starclan?" seapaw was very exsited so young and chosen by starclan as seapaw spoke her voice quivered "i would like that very much."then you shall have it the voice ecohed from far away seapaw opened her eyes to see that she was in the nursery as seapaw walked into the middle of camp she decided to try running she took one running step and was at the other side of the camp starclan had given her a gift but why?
*please post your comments on this i might write more*
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Dec 11, 2005 19:35:18 GMT -5
Post by rex. on Dec 11, 2005 19:35:18 GMT -5
nice. there were some spelling and punctuation errors, but the rest up it was very good and creative. nice job^_^
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Dec 11, 2005 19:39:16 GMT -5
Post by *Simply Seasle* on Dec 11, 2005 19:39:16 GMT -5
thanks i don't use puntctuation when i write a story (nomally) it distacts me
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Dec 11, 2005 21:27:36 GMT -5
Post by *Simply Seasle* on Dec 11, 2005 21:27:36 GMT -5
seapaw ran every day loving the feel of speeding across the ground.maybe she thought i was given this gift because i was meant to be a leader. she then thought there is no way i could be a leader maybe if i'm lucky i will be a senior warrior but the thought wouldn't go away.the next day she decided to go into thunderclan territory to get her mind off things. as seakit entered the forest she could smell a thunderclan cat . a voice meowed theatingly"why are you here?" *post who you think the thunderclan cat should be*
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Dec 12, 2005 21:23:38 GMT -5
Post by icefang on Dec 12, 2005 21:23:38 GMT -5
Why does punctuation/spelling distract you? And when is this taking place (like, should it be Brambleclaw, Tigerclaw, or an older warrior like Thistleclaw?"
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Dec 13, 2005 19:09:02 GMT -5
Post by *Simply Seasle* on Dec 13, 2005 19:09:02 GMT -5
it makes forget the story's details i don't know why
its happing now seapaw is in windclan i'm not trying to make my cat a leader or powerful i just came up with the idea that some windclan cats could run like the wind and i wanted to make my cat have this power if you want you can post a dream that gives you this gift i hope dessie won't mind this
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Dec 26, 2005 13:34:17 GMT -5
Post by The Only Froggems YOU KNOW! on Dec 26, 2005 13:34:17 GMT -5
i like it although it is a little confusing without punc.
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Dec 29, 2005 20:49:45 GMT -5
Post by *Simply Seasle* on Dec 29, 2005 20:49:45 GMT -5
I'm not doing that as much anymore
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Jan 12, 2006 21:06:46 GMT -5
Post by *Simply Seasle* on Jan 12, 2006 21:06:46 GMT -5
Seapaw turned around to see a dark tabby standing behind her.She slid under his belly and ran as fast as possible back to WindClan camp.Seapaw decided that she should be more careful next time and slipped into the appentice's den.As Seapaw went to sleep stange voices meowed softly"Will you be the leader, one will be needed soon," and "Please lead these cats out of danger?".Seapaw, half alsleep meowed,"Yes, yes of course i will, why not?". After Seapaw said these words the voices faded, and Seapaw went to sleep.
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Jan 19, 2006 17:57:13 GMT -5
Post by The Only Froggems YOU KNOW! on Jan 19, 2006 17:57:13 GMT -5
yeah! is that it? oh, well i liked it!
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Jan 20, 2006 17:10:44 GMT -5
Post by *Simply Seasle* on Jan 20, 2006 17:10:44 GMT -5
it's just a little story from my cat Seapaw
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