Mousefire

[rosestar]

name: Mousefire
clan: Wind Clan
position: warrior
age: 30 moons
gender: tom
peltage: sleek ash pelt with darker stripes blazing amber eyes thin with long legs and tail with notch on ear
personality:a former rouge cat taken in as a kit, he has deep resentment towards the clans. He's very ambitious and has repeatedly tried to become deputy, almost exiling himself from the clan at times. Believing Wind Clan stole him from his clan, he vows to rejoin with rouges and destroy the forest. Although seemingly evil, he can be quite friendly and is an excellent hunter.
IC: Mousefire stormed out of the leaders den, spitting with rage. " How dare she, accusing me with fraud.She destroyed my clan!!I'll get my revenge soon, don't let her worry about that....."
code:rouge

[//Cindy// l u n a]

Okay... a few things:

Can you make your peltage into four or so full sentences?
Can you add a sentence onto the IC?
The code isn't Rogue - check the rules for what it is.

Thanks.

[Mousefire]

okay then hows this?

name: Mousefire
clan: Wind Clan
position: warrior
age: 30 moons
gender: tom
peltage: sleek ash pelt with darker stripes and blazing amber eyes. thin with long legs and tail with notch on ear. strong but not very muscular.
personality:a former rouge cat taken in as a kit, he has deep resentment towards the clans. He's very ambitious and has repeatedly tried to become deputy, almost exiling himself from the clan at times. Believing Wind Clan stole him from his clan, he vows to rejoin with rouges and destroy the forest. Although seemingly evil, he can be quite friendly and is an excellent hunter.
IC: Mousefire stormed out of the leaders den, spitting with rage. " How dare she, accusing me with fraud.She destroyed my clan!!I'll get my revenge soon, don't let her worry about that....." He ran through the forest, ignoring the scents of prey, trying to get away from her evil.
code:blood

and by the way this is my cat it just logged out when i was doing it.

[//Cindy// l u n a]

Much better! Accepted.