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Post by Midnightstorm on Sept 12, 2007 19:24:34 GMT -5
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Post by STREAMY ?! on Sept 12, 2007 19:52:13 GMT -5
Your bio should be in third person, not first. And try to make it a bit longer. The IC should be something like:
Yellow eyes followed the small creature as it scrambled towards the bush. At the last second, the lithe shape pounced. A hiss of satisfaction was released into the air as a black paw swiped the air and hit the poor mouse in the nape of the neck, breaking the end of the spine and killing the brown creature.
Not:
I like to hunt, I love vole, I am honored to protect my Clan.
Now, I'm not expecting you to do an IC as good as mine, since you are a beginner, but make an effort.
Do you know how to edit a post? If not, go to your post and look on the top right-hand corner of your post. Click 'modify'.
One last thing--The title of your post should be something like Firekit--WindClan. Or something like that. You can edit the title when you edit the post.
=)
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Post by Nightpaw on Sept 14, 2007 17:36:15 GMT -5
Coolness. Have you checked your messages?
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