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Post by ked on Feb 4, 2006 17:08:40 GMT -5
Name:Blacktail
Clan:Windclan
Position:Elder.
Age:168moons
Gender:Tom
Peltage:Blacktail is white tom with a black tail and blue eyes.
Personality:Blacktail is always happy to tell stories, but gets grumpy when he's hungry.
IC:Blacktail's ears twitched as he slowly woke up. He lifted his head and yawned. Slowly, he stood up, to see if any of the apprentices had brought him some fresh-kill. Sadly, there was no fresh-kill. Angry he yawled, hoping that someone would come and see to him. *When I was an apprentice, elders where much better treated than this. Aw, I remeber them days, when I was able to run around*, he thought.
Code:Winter
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Post by {//.Ð € SS Î €.\\} on Feb 4, 2006 17:23:58 GMT -5
The IC is a bit confusing. Perhaps you should do the thoughts in italics. Also, RP is done in past tense. Ex: Desertstar walked up to the cats
Everything else is good!
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Post by ked on Feb 4, 2006 17:33:41 GMT -5
Sorry o.-
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Post by {//.Ð € SS Î €.\\} on Feb 4, 2006 17:56:20 GMT -5
Much better! Accepted
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Post by ked on Feb 4, 2006 18:15:19 GMT -5
Yayz
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